Final Cut

Movie Poster Improved

This is our film poster that would tie into the Marketing campaign, using this poster on social media to appeal to our target audience.

I feel this poster is good because it includes the companies we worked with, tells you whose film it is and then the title is big and bold so people know what the film is and by the title they can maybe guess that it is a documentary (if not they will notice the producers) and lastly the still behind is included in the film, I thought the close up on a persons eye catches peoples attention and maybe provokes thoughts of looking into that persons eye and knowing the story of the film.

I got feedback on the poster above from my teacher Mrs Brookes, she said that the image in the poster didn't have enough to do with tattoos and made it look more like an indie arts film or something not tattoos so I must try and make the image behind more artsy, this meant i remade the poster on Photoshop with a screen cap from one of the clips from filming in the tattoo parlour. The shot was a reflection on a class cabinet which contained tattoo ink and I pulled focus to focus on its reflection and luckily in line with the cabinet was a tattoo artist tattooing a woman. So in the image you can see little bottles of ink, tattoo supplies, an artist, tattooing being done and all the posters of tattoos on walls. I think this portrays that the film Tatted Generation is definitely about tattoos.

This is my remake of the poster :

Peer Feedback

This is feedback from the media classes on my First draft of my opening sequence for media

Holding Shot steady where appropriate
Everyone said this was excellent, that all my shots were steady where appropriate, that the camerawork was excellent.

Framing a Shot
All the framing of the shots was said to be excellent including everything that was relevant and appropriate.

Using a Variety of shots & Distances
I used all the shot types (extreme close up, close up, mid, long shot, extreme lone shot) and did so at different angels (high &low). I used the shots appropriately keeping interest through the montage but apparently there were too many close ups, I will look at a way of taking out some of the close up although some said that the close up were like-able.

Using Titles Appropriatly
Titles were seen to vary from Proficient to excellent, they were known to be appropriate in style, font and colour, the simplicity of them shows how it is a high budget film and goes along with the documentary feel of the film but it was thought the spacing of the titles needed to be looked at.

Mise en Scene
The mise en scene of the tattoo parlour helped with giving to the topic of Tattoos being focus very clearly. The colours overall of the films were apparently very nice, it wasn't all the same colour throughout making it nice to look at but some people said the constant light to dark changes of the shots was not very good.

Editing so that the meaning is apparent
My editing was applauded and appropriate for the genre of a documentary. It was said that the opening starts more generally around the subject and then gets to the point, that the shots are in a good order. The interview is a bit too long though because it feels like it is the end of a film.

Shot transitions and other effects
Shots cut a lot because there are no real transition effects on the narration montages but apparently this goes well because it goes along with the narration and what the narrative that is trying to be put across and because of this it flows well. Also because of the transitioning from shot to shot being fast it gave the film pace which is what I wanted I wanted the fast pace top replicate the craziness of society and then to slow down once the complete narrative had been dropped.

Using sound with Images and editing
The music is really good and sets the atmosphere but sometimes the narrations. The tattoo parlour sound is loud and what is being said can barely be heard, something needs to be done here to improve. Subtitles could be used during the interviews.

Title Timeline

This is a timeline of the titles as they show up in the final cut of the opening sequence of Tatted Generation.

First Draft

This is our first draft of the film opening for our documentary Tatted Generation. We will get feedback on this first draft and act accordingly to improve.

Script (New)

After the feedback from Mrs Field that had one point that our script focused too much on that every one conformed to the norm and that we weren't really presenting that the documentary was about expression within society and that sometimes the use of big words can become pretentious and bore the watcher/listener. There fore we re wrote the script, keeping it simple and with the key values of the documentary in mind.

Shooting Schedule

This the shooting schedule of everything we shot, when and where.

Filming Evidence (Part 2)

This is photographic evidence of filming of the opening piece...

Film Poster

This is the poster that I have created for our film. I used a shot from our short film opening and I have chosen this scene, as this is artsy and this a dark scene in our film opening therefore the writing would show up easier than using a scene with a light background. We chose as a group to use Ben Griffiths production logo as it the most artsy logo and stands out the most out of our production logo's.

Teacher Feedback

First Draft Feedback - Teacher Feedback


Mrs Brookes


WWW - Camera shots, Editing and Mise En Scene.

EBI - link between intro and tattoo where is that? Voice over a little to complex maybe shorter and shorter. When you walk into the parlour, you need intro. Job title needed. Lower tattooing sound. Cut out "yeah". Need more tattoo scenes.



Mrs Field


WWW - Shots are very well done. Editing is good.

EBI - Need to simplify the narration at the beginning of the film opening. Improve sound of the tattoo noise. Job titles should be added. Need to remove the constant "yeah".


Mr Amato


Really like the titles but can be positioned better.

Feels TV Documentary rather than a film, this could be because of the instant voice over. More instant talking and change the font that you use as it goes on and on and I do not like the late titles. Subject matter hands you some potentially beautiful shots that wait really evident.


Improvements from Feedback


We can improve from this feedback as we are able to go into other tattoo parlours and we are able to film more tattoos and we can film other tattoo parlours to change the scenery and we are able to film for filler shots and to make the documentary film more interesting by using different scenes. We are able to cut out the "yeah" throughout the interview and we will use subtitles to be able to understand what Alexsandrs Hirsfelds (the tattoo artist) his answers to the questions which we may display almost as subtitles to understand the questions and the answers and this will solve the problem of not understanding his voice clearly. We will be attempting to reduce the sound of the tattoo gun and we will most likely use a program like audacity to remove or to quieten the noise of the tattoo gun.

Risk Assessment